Isabella Finch

I think that is a great idea Rumi. Though it almost makes the revival items completely pointless as I believe they have a cool down period that lasts as long as the cool down on the kill items.

[quote name='Chewett' timestamp='1339431302' post='114354'] I now sit at GoC, dead. I don't have any time to roleplay some event to revive myself, and I will not be paying anyone to revive myself. Death to someone who doesn't roleplay means only that either the community will roleplay for them, and the gods will deem them worthy to be brought back, or that they pay. Clearly in spars case, he couldn't pay, and sadly I didn't see too much action for the roleplay so he faded away. This is entirely stupid, there needs to be more mechanics so that people who have died, have some way to be reborn that isnt paying someone an extortionate amount of coin or roleplay that isn't guaranteed to work. When Mur gave out revival items, it was obvious that they would slowly move to the highest bidders, those who would keep them for themselves. The "normal" person has little chance to be revived by an item, unless they have friends that hold said items. Death seems unfinished, especially when it is exceptionally hard for someone to be revived. In Spar's you just tell him to go away, he cant play MD anymore. Many of you wont have bothered to listen to spar, But hopefully someone is going to listen to what im saying. Quite simply, I'm just going to wait, I don't have time to do any roleplay to save me currently, nor will i be wasting my coin buying the use of a revival item. Lets see if I last longer than Spar until some change happens in MD. [/quote] As far as I understand it, Many did not want to help Spartiatis because he went so long without trying to do anything to help himself. So with you doing the same, what makes you think your "life" is more valuable than his? Especially if you are going to do nothing to help yourself just as he had done. And pretending not to care about being killed, that it was a cool thing to add to the game after you were even seen cursing like a sailor, breaking rules doing so, in the mood panel and even saying here that this is stupid... Seems a bit confusing to me. Again, you don't decide to go against something unless it involves you personally.

I think, if you are hoping to revive the Spartan by killing someone more popular to have them both revived... You chose the wrong target. But then... I am bias.

[quote name='Chewett' timestamp='1339393413' post='114323'] I know a number of people who play alts well in different lands and alliances.[/quote] Doesn't mean I can't have my own opinion, though honestly alts has nothing to do with the prime problem as it isn't mentioned in the rule that is being up for debate. [quote name='Chewett' timestamp='1339393413' post='114323'] Mur did it then, Most people dont argue with Mur, wheras council everyone loves to argue with them. I remember little/no argument to the rule when murry announced it, nor any when/if he removed alliances before.[/quote] That is basically my point. [quote name='Chewett' timestamp='1339393413' post='114323'] But you are applying for an alliance no? I asked you about an alliance before you "hated" on me.[/quote] I don't recall what you are talking about but one person seeking entrance into an alliance that is known and respected is far different than an alliance seeking membership because it has only one or two people and needs more to stay alive based on a rule that has been in motion for over a year now.

I don't believe alts should be allowed in different alliances. If there was to be a "war" between your alliance and the alliance your alt is in, what would you do? You aren't allowed to attack yourself. It is against the rules. And as for the rule regarding the minimum of three members... It was posted before that back in 2009 this rule was announced. Maybe 2010. That is two or three years that this rule has been standing. Where was all this discussion about it then? Or did you just not care then because it didn't affect you then? I would think the best question is, if you are really that concerned about it, then why not do something about it? I have been in the game for over 100 days now and I had never heard of Fyrd's alliance before. There are plenty of people who are unaffiliated with any alliances. I for one have never been asked into any alliance, nor had any of my alts. Three simple members can't be that hard to achieve...

Well.. There is the whole "combat system" thing...

Looking great so far. And I love the idea of a small zen garden or rock garden. I have a couple small ideas... but I would prefer to speak to you about them in private, mostly for fear of people thinking them totally stupid. Which they may be...

Completely ooc here.. What happens with him now? Was this person seriously just run from the game because not enough people would offer coins for a revival or heat for a revival? Does he have to start completely over now or what? I tried to collect coins and people kept insisting the heat thing would work. He even had money tied up in the game and he is forced to quit? I'm not fully understanding this.

Just.. Wow...

I've had similar problems with alternate sites. It might have something to do with your cache, if you know how to deal with it.

Mine is fine too. Maybe you need to restart your computer or something?

I read it and still stand by my idea. I can see how many I have as I gain more and I can trade it or give it away and use it, so I would like the option to break it down, even if I have to pay cash to do so in the shop. It is just an idea and I was under the impression that the game is "player made" and that things can change if enough people work for it. I also stated it wasn't overly important. Just something I would like to see -eventually-.

[quote name='Chewett' timestamp='1339017063' post='113779'] You know that mur wrote a lot of information stating why resources shouldnt be split and such, and that its been designed as such? Its quite possibly you dont know, and therefore i would advise you to search this information out. [/quote] I did not know, but even so... I still think it would be nice. Say I have water I can use 50 times... and someone else needs water, but they only need to use it ten times, maybe I could use a new item like... a measuring cup to allow me to give away or trade water the ten times so I still have forty uses of mine left. If that makes any sense to you. Maybe it could even be an item to buy in the shop to be given the choice to separate things out of convenience. Maybe we could buy separate inventories to place different items in. If I had two, I could store water in one for trading, or herbs or wood and in the other store what I wouldn't want to give away or trade because I would need it for other things. Or maybe we could buy pockets for out inventories if they are like bags and we could separate things that way. There could be multiple ways to do it. And it would make things easier, especially for newer players. I have no way to collect water. I had to trade my way up to what I have now and if I use it or trade it for something I need, there is no telling when I could ever get it back again. Same with sand and wood. It could even act like the heat rocks. They could be bottles or crates and it holds however much we put into it and once it fills or no matter how much is in it, it is one, but it is separate from the single resource because it is in a separate container..

It isn't overly important at all... But I would like to find a way to divide my resources in my inventory. If I have 50 water and want to give away or trade only half of it rather than all because it is stacked... I think that could be quite useful.

If you don't want to use a separator as Lightsage suggested, then I would suggest you simply make both parts longer and make them each into a chapter. Or separate the chapter into Part a and Part b. And a neko is a cat person. Which, from what I have seen, is what Lintara kind of is. If I were you, I would ask each person whose character I have permission to use and ask them for a detailed description of the character for what they look like and what their race is, even the age they are suppose to be. And for a character such as Innocence, if you are unable to use the character correctly, then maybe choose to use another. There are other characters that acted as journalists. Maybe Grido would be a better choice if he gave permission, or one of the other journalists. Unless Innocence is okay with being pure female within your story. That would be between you and the player behind Innocence. Or you could just say in the book that the character is neither male or female but that Windy likes to think it is female and so refers to her that way. I would opt for just choosing someone else... but it isn't my book.

Alright.

[quote name='Tom Pouce' timestamp='1338855730' post='113405'] what have you done except making bad riddle .. riddle of old that you completely ruin in making it your own so they become not logically solvable? and not accepting logical possible altenative answers? or repying that you are in love? whoa thats an exploit as month to solve no mans land its an exploit [/quote] I gave you that riddle and you didn't even try to think it over. You answered in five seconds and it was the wrong answer. Eon was given the same exact riddle and got it right. So how was that unsolvable? Every one of my riddles I gave out was answered by someone. And the love part... I have no idea what you are talking about. I was the last person pulled into the dominion tunnel event, I had less time than most of the others as I did not volunteer for it. I had no idea it was even taking place. I was asked to do it. And I did it to gain citizenship into the East Lands. Because I had so little time to prepare, I did riddles. And because I was so new to the game, I chose not to make them game related. Mur had told us before hand that they did not have to be game related, as long as they were not cultural. I could have given you an agebraic equation if I wanted to. I didn't. What have I done in the game? I have met people. Isabella has made some friends, made some enemies, traveled much of the lands, has trained and is learning more about the game as it becomes available to her. How does my game experience matter in the fact that I think tools should not be sharable with everyone and that you shouldn't be able to explore everywhere the moment you sign up? And what are you calling an exploit exactly? The fact that it took me longer than the average person to understand the map and how to get places within No man's land? How is that exploiting anything?

I don't remember if I negative reputationed your idea or not. I may have. I did not like your idea. Things are depleted enough already, so no I do not think just "anyone" should have access to the tools. I finally got into Loreroot and picked up a basket for the very first time but didn't even use it. I had one available chance as there was ONE herb on my way into the East. I chose to let it grow and guess what? Someone went right behind me and took it. Not an hour after I made a bet with someone that it would happen. And that depleted the herbs in the scene. People are already having trouble with this, so letting just anyone have the tools without earning them first... It is a bad idea. Why? Because people are greedy. Why does a new player who has no idea what is going on need to worry about gaining resources for anyway? If they were truly new and not alts, then they have enough to learn about anyway without adding the need to gain resources right away on top of it. And the other idea, the filters... I had no idea what you were even talking about with that. I was thinking you meant with language.. but that didn't make sense. I just don't know. Edit to add because I completely forgot: Viscosity. One of the biggest things you tend to be told, over and over, is that you must have patience. Is it frustrating? Yes. But is there reasoning to the madness? Yes. I am still a new player even though I finally have over 100 days and I am still learning things. I am still touring the land and learning about it. It literally took me a month to even figure out No man's land. Sometimes I still get a touch lost with the way it back tracks. If I had been given access to everything the moment I signed up, I would have either looked at everything and then got bored and quit because there doesn't seem to be much rping, or I would have been completely overwhelmed and I would have quit. This game is meant to be long term. That is why there is stock in gaining more ap over time to go against the viscosity to slowly work your way into places you had no access to beforehand. And you mentioned alts too. I have never played a game where abusing it with the use of alts was okay. And if you know all these things about what veterans could and couldn't do when they began, it makes me wonder how long you have been playing and if you are a veteran that was banned at some point and is now wanting to be able to play the way you were able to when the game started. For a new player... You seem to know quite a bit... Just a small observation.

Yes! Description is definitely needed. Especially with the scene, even if it is with just the pub for fear of not being able to spoil the places for new players or something. Though I would think most places in Marind bell could be described in more detail. I know in rp you have described the floor as being marble once or twice but I don't believe you have given that detail in the chapters. I love having the picture painted for me as I am reading. Like with Lintara and Sagewoman, a reader who has never met these characters in game might imagine two women in their twenties. Brunettes maybe. Attractive women in a club designed for kissing men. The mind does not jump to an elderly woman who has described herself to being a hag in appearance in some ways. And Lintara? Readers may find interest in knowing she is a young neko type character. Far different than a pair of similar brunettes. And what does Windy herself look like? I think the best book to look at, in my opinion, for help or just for some inspiration, is the Lord of the Ring series by JRR Tolkien. You don't want to bore the readers, but you have to remember, you are the reader's eyes. They can only see what you let them see.

It seems interesting. Too bad it no longer exists.

There seems to be even more mistakes with these last two chapters. And when I read these, I get the feeling you are gearing your work towards older children, yet the content seems to be of an adult theme since it is based around kissing in the setting of a bar. So I suppose I am a bit conflicted with that. Yes most characters seem to be captured well,with the exception of Innocence who I believe is still genderless in MagicDuel, but not in your story. Which leads to a couple more points. I'm not sure the reader needs to be taught on the meaning of "seemingly unknown" as you went into a bit too much detail there I think and you said in the last chapter that the sun was quickly setting into darkness as was natural for the world of Magic Duel... I thought the opposite was true, that the sun never sets and that is why darkness and night never really happen here because one never sees the moon. I think my character has even come across an older character whose mission is to find artifacts from the moon goddess but finds it difficult because night is so rare. I know you wanted to keep thinks very authentic to the game so I thought I would bring that up. Also, the last chapter, you began as someone else. You began as "the bandit". I actually really liked that you wrote from that perspective and was disappointed that you abandoned that persona rather quickly into the chapter and changed back into the persona of Windy. It seemed to be a rather radical change in the middle of a chapter without any break to give warning to the reader. Even a decent space with a few stars to represent a change could have worked for a transitioning since both parts were far too short for decent chapters to stand alone. And I want to say this before I am called out on anything, these are merely my opinions and given to offer help. That is all. I'm not trying to be mean or critical on your project. I think it is nice that you are trying to branch out with your imagination in this manner. I just think it needs a bit of work. And I am still not a fan of the basis for your story, but I do wish you good luck on your endeavor. Oh, and a small question. The setting and characters are all game based... but is the plot as well? Is this based on a true event that happened? Or is that part made up? And is the newspaper portion true as well? I would be interested in looking into that if it is an actual thing in the game.

If the ghost was sent to his body... Wouldn't it have been where he died? I thought he was killed in a sanctuary? I didn't think the Gazebo of Chaos was a sanctuary... Also, Isn't Sasha a ghost as well? Or are there more than one Sasha?

Again it is short and there are a few errors. And I was under the impression "Innocence" was neither male nor female? Maybe I have her confused with someone else. And I wasn't "tramping" you, Windy... Whatever that means.. But you asked for your work to be critiqued.

It is rather short to be a whole chapter of a book, isn't it? And there were a few errors. Also, you had told us that Mur said you weren't allowed to use him, yet you mentioned him in the form of a God. I didn't think he wanted to be used at all? Also, I would probably like it more it was based on more than a group of women whose only goal, seemingly, is to kiss men they come across. Good luck with the rest however.

I believe he has been revived. Could this be closed or something please? And thanks to everyone who was willing to pitch in.